O Island! My Island!

(This is  my 50th post and 5th poem)
I first heard the phrase "O Captain! My Captain!", in the movie "Dead Poet's Society" and got to know about the poem by Walt Whitman about the death of Abraham Lincoln. I liked the way the phrase sounded and being a amateur poet, thought of writing  a poem with a similar beginning. As always the poem is dedicated to the same woman, but this time I am trying to convey a different message than my previous poems. Anyhoo here it goes -

Lost was I, on a tide so high,
barely able to swim, with the chances so slim,
I washed up on you, with lungs full of dew,
O Island! My Island!

I opened my eyes, to see the lovely price,
the green of the trees, felt the sea breeze,
heard the singing birds, and the running herds
O Island! My Island!

Bit by bit I started to explore,
to realize you were everything I was looking for.
Dreamt of the day, that I will stay,
being all yours, forever on your shores 
O Island! My Island!

Then I got to know, you dint want me there,
that gave me a blow, like a huge grizzly bear.
I waited for years, sometimes in tears,
hoping things will change, maybe I'm a derange
O Island! My Island!

One day as I came out of my hutch and saw a patron on the shore,
who seemed to love you as much or maybe even more,
I decided to recede, cause he was harbored,
I will concede, as his feelings were favored, 
O Island! My Island!

On that cue, I started to swim away from you,
with the thought in my mind, that I may never find,
an Island as great as you, in the vast ocean blue
O Island! My Island!


As always, all kinds of criticisms, comments and compliments(if any) are welcome...:)